I didn't like it because it was repetitive and unoriginal. I've read the same subject with slightly different words over and over. This wasn't anything new. You might want to look up "flow" too. I think that always makes a better poem. Anyone can be a good poet. There's just certain things that your poetry cannot lack. Find out what those things are and you can be a great writer.

excuse me? what the hell are you talking about? it seemes to me that your trying to say that i copyed this poem. It's not repetivtive,ok? it just starts with takie it away, big deal.
If you didnt like this you didnt need to comment it. I dont need rude people such as yourself to comment on anything i do.

what do you mean look up "flow"? Not all poems have to rhyme or something. It can have a beat to it and be good.

I already think i'm a great writer and so do others. Maybe you might want to consider taking your own advice.

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I am sorry you lack the intelligence to take no offense to critiques. If you didn't want the truth from someone then I suggest you limiting the type of critiques you allow. Until then, your anger is meaningless and redundant.

I did not say you copied your poem. I do not doubt that it is yours. I just said that the idea is overdone. It sounds the same as everyone else. You're not really making a unique voice with your poetry.

In reference to the "if you didnt like this you didnt need to comment it." Are those comments by people who like your work making you a great writer? Are they the ones who think you are great? Good for you. People like your work. Many famous poets have started out with people hating their work, so lucky you Great Writer. You have started out with a fan club.

When I say you should luck up flow, I mean you should see how it works and what it means. Then you should try to apply it to your work. FLOW and RHYME are two DIFFERENT things. I never referenced rhyme in my comment.

Thank you for your reply, and your ignorance.

Like a wise man once said "consider the source" which is why I will stop replying to your childish comments.....I like constructive criticism but not from one that rhymes DISTINCTION with DISTINCTION...duh....I do understand that sometimes it takes a greater mind to undestand my poems and I see you are not on that level yet and I don't fault you for that....Wether you are just ignorant or just plain DUMB ...thats something you will have to live with for the rest of your life and I pitty you for that....so HAVE A GREAT LIFE MY FRIEND....and forgive me if I ignore the rest of your messages but I think I will CONSIDER THE SOURCE...........CIAO

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Like a wise man once said "consider the source" which is why I will stop replying to your childish comments.....I like constructive criticism but not from one that rhymes DISTINCTION with DISTINCTION...duh....I do understand that sometimes it takes a greater mind to undestand my poems and I see you are not on that level yet and I don't fault you for that....Wether you are just ignorant or just plain DUMB ...thats something you will have to live with for the rest of your life and I pitty you for that....so HAVE A GREAT LIFE MY FRIEND....and forgive me if I ignore the rest of your messages but I think I will CONSIDER THE SOURCE...........CIAO

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Oh thank you Great Writer for your enlightenment.

-and- If you are refering to the single poem of mine that I have posted, it is called Spoken Word. I don't know if you have heard of such poetry, but I doubt it from what you have said of distinction. Good luck with your future writings.

Criticism is criticism no matter the source. It's all on how you take it that makes you the better person, and all the better writer. Good luck with learning to take that criticism in the future, that is if you can get any from real writers that aren't already in your fan club.

Have a nice day.
By the way, I forgive you for ignoring this comment and all others, and for everything else puerile girl.

Don't sweat it~this person doesn't even have anything posted for anybody to comment on. It's easy for people to make harsh critiques when they have nothing up to critique themselves.

I think you've done a fine job~it flows just fine without being a cliche. It is expressive without being a joke and this is why I like it. It's a little melancholy for my taste, but then I'm a generally upbeat person.

Take care and keep writing!

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thanks, i just get mad easily when people expect me to write the way they like it.
thanks again

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